The Interesting Trip

China            Thursday 5:00 am   ’’Lee get up, you  have to go to school,’’ yelled Mom. ‘’Just 5 more minutes,’’ I said tiredly. ‘’Ok.’’ Mom answered. ‘’Lee, Mom told me to tell you to get up !‘’ Shang yelled. ’’Fine,’’ … Continue reading 

Story Lead #1

’’Lee get up you  have to go to school’’yelled mom.

‘’Just 5 more minutes’’ I said tiredly.

‘’Fine’’mom answered.

‘’Lee mom told me to tell you to get up !‘’ Shang yelled.

’’Fine’’  I said. I jumped up and made my bed. Then I got in my favorite Jade green dress and brushed my raven black hair. Next I put on my light blue necklace that grandma Jojo gave me and  I got my backpack that was covered in pandas. I went downstairs.

 

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